Your Help Needed for the Hook To My Novel

I’m trying to create a more compelling hook for my novel. That said: if you have any suggestions or changes you think I should make to the one below, please comment. You have until Friday, the 13th, to post.

NOTE: I will cite the poster of the best hook in the “Acknowledgements” section of my novel.

Thanks for your help.

“Frank asked about my drinking, too, before I stabbed him and buried him under the house,” Mama said with a straight face.

Startled, Ramon jumped. Is she joking? The 12-year-old wondered. But there was no expression on her face: only her glowering eyes. Flooded with fear, Ramon ran to his room, locking the door behind him. He got out his bat and held onto it all night until the early morning light lit up his room.

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